The disparate views of my essay by various markers really prove that you cant please everyone: peer 1 → The greatest strength of this essay is word choice and sentence structure because specific words used add meaning and interest to the essay while the sentence structure lends to an easy understanding of the argument. The greatest weakness of this essay is possibly the attempt to draw a connection to Franz Kafka because it does not necessarily do so successfully and seems to actually detract from the argument concerning use of literary techniques. Future essays could be improved by removing extraneous arguments or connections from outside the text. ... peer 2 → A very compelling and clearly argued essay with a strong understanding of the page and its context. A bit over-wrought with unneccesarily complicated language. To my mind at least I think this essay would be improved by simplifying your vocabulary a little, some of the obscure terms are justified but some just felt like showing off, which I think is bad writing and also likely to confuse a lot of people in a free international course like this with no prerequisites. Or maybe I just need to read more ;) ... peer 3 → 1. The essay includes writing techniques which shows the writer is well versed with the art 2. The essay lacks cohesion and is unable to focus wholly on the analysis, synthesis, and thesis 3. Keep it simple, make it more fluid and flowing ... peer 4 → You have written an excellent essay. It was interesting to read it. It gave an entirely different feel and thoughts about comic books and graphic novels. Its interesting to the read the thoughts of Franz Kafka in your essay.
Posted on: Mon, 17 Nov 2014 01:19:12 +0000
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